Please don't make me spell it out for you

I'm still tinkering. What do you reckon? Is this one a hit or a miss? Your frank (nay, brutal) feedback will guide my efforts, so please give it to me with both barrels! One-word reviews welcome!

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Comment by The Rusty Can

January 2nd 2009 11:27

Everything

I think it'll work, Paul. Personally, I'd like it more if the writing wasn't in a box and was printed in some other colour - say pink or blue, (yellow if on a black singlet).

And congrats on your success so far - hope your year gets better and better!

Rusty.

Comment by moonglow

January 2nd 2009 15:43

Honestly, I can't read it. Let me know what it says. I like the shirt style, though!

Comment by katyzzz

January 2nd 2009 21:34

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Congrats, it IS hard to read, what's that you say? but it is funny, needs much larger type, otherwise smart, smarta......

Comment by Paul

January 2nd 2009 21:40

Surreal Short Stories

You guys are so generous! Thanks very much for your ace feedback! I will take it all on board & post the result. Best regards indeed! P.

Comment by moonglow

January 3rd 2009 00:46

Okay, moonglow's eyes have adjusted now that it is nighttime and I can read it.

It is hilarious!! And, again, I love the style! I'm longing for summer!

Comment by Paul

January 3rd 2009 01:04

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Yay! Glad you got it, moonglow. I will produce a new, improved version in due course. All designs come in long sleeves, by the way. Best regards, P.

Comment by Janet Collins

January 3rd 2009 06:00

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I ad trouble reading this also. In fact I had to scroll my mouse over it and the words came out in a box on the side. Very funny but I dare say, the print needs to be bigger.

Comment by Paul

January 3rd 2009 06:03

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Thank you, Janet; I'm sure glad I didn't have 200 of these printed in advance!

Comment by Wilson Pon

January 4th 2009 12:17

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Honestly, I think it would be better, if you print the words in larger fonts, Paul.

Comment by Paul

January 4th 2009 20:18

Surreal Short Stories

Many thanks, Wilson; that's great advice which I've followed. Check my latest post for the result! Best regards, P.

Comment by D. Armenta

February 4th 2009 19:10

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Like it.

Sell it!

Comment by Paul

February 9th 2009 02:28

Surreal Short Stories

Many thanks, D. The revised version has now sold two units. In the blurb that goes with it at the LINK, I thank Orblers for their input. That now includes you! Best regards, P.

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